青衫1 发表于 2012-12-20 19:42:00

<font color="red"><font color="lime">春</font>飞大地绿乡湾,<br/><font color="lime">&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; 江</font>水不停到海滩。<br/><font color="lime">&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; 花</font>卉馨香飘苑外,<br/><font color="lime">&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; &nbsp;月</font>光耀影景迷观。<br/><font color="lime">&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; 夜</font>阑风静人痴醉,<br/><font color="lime">&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; &nbsp;色</font>美心舒燕正酣。<br/><font color="lime">&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; &nbsp;娇</font>媚西施频笑语,<br/><font color="lime">&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; 柔</font>声似蜜纵情欢。</font>
[此贴子已经被作者于2012-12-20 19:43:40编辑过]

袭帘之然 发表于 2012-12-21 08:38:00

<span style="font-size: large; font-family: 楷体_GB2312;">好一个</span><div><span style="font-size: large; font-family: 楷体_GB2312;">春江花月夜色娇柔呀!!!</span></div><div><span style="font-size: large; font-family: 楷体_GB2312;"><br/></span></div><div><span style="font-size: large; font-family: 楷体_GB2312;">青衫早!</span></div><div><span style="font-family: 楷体_GB2312; font-size: large;">今天冬至</span></div><div><span style="font-family: 楷体_GB2312; font-size: large;">冬过那春即将来,此刻,我想等雪来,于是说:</span></div><div><span style="font-family: 楷体_GB2312; font-size: large;">雪,我们等你来,你来了,春天就不远了。</span></div><div><br/></div><div><span style="font-family: 楷体_GB2312; font-size: large;">春天桃花艳</span></div><div><span style="font-family: 楷体_GB2312; font-size: large;">夏日荷花香</span></div><div><span style="font-family: 楷体_GB2312; font-size: large;">三秋菊花寒</span></div><div><span style="font-family: 楷体_GB2312; font-size: large;">冬来雪如玉</span></div><div><span style="font-family: 楷体_GB2312; font-size: large;">花朵是季节眉心上的痣</span></div><div><span style="font-family: 楷体_GB2312; font-size: large;">漂在尘世间,</span></div><div><span style="font-family: 楷体_GB2312; font-size: large;">妆点着红尘,</span></div><div><span style="font-family: 楷体_GB2312; font-size: large;">温暖着乾坤。</span></div><div style="font-family: Verdana; font-size: 14px; "><br/></div>

独上西楼 发表于 2012-12-21 10:27:00

<div class="quote"><b>以下是引用<i>青衫1</i>在2012-12-20 19:42:00的发言:</b></div>
<div class="quote"><strong></strong><br/><font color="red"><font color="lime">春</font>飞大地绿乡湾,<br/><font color="lime">&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; 江</font>水不停到海滩。<br/><font color="lime">&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; 花</font>卉馨香飘苑外,<br/><font color="lime">&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; &nbsp;月</font>光耀影景迷观。<br/><font color="lime">&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; 夜</font>阑风静人痴醉,<br/><font color="lime">&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; &nbsp;色</font>美心舒燕正酣。<br/><font color="lime">&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; &nbsp;娇</font>媚西施频笑语,<br/><font color="lime">&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; 柔</font>声似蜜纵情欢。</font></div>
<div class="quote" align="right"><font color="#000066">[此贴子已经被作者于2012-12-20 19:43:40编辑过]</font></div>
<p><font color="#003300" size="4">&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; 春意盎然之作!</font> </p>
[此贴子已经被作者于2012-12-21 21:16:33编辑过]

熊猫先生 发表于 2012-12-21 10:45:00

太关注文字工整了 虽然很饱满 感觉还是为文而文&nbsp; 抛弃了诗文的本质需求 容易堕入玩物丧志境界&nbsp; 个人见解 谅

青衫1 发表于 2012-12-24 20:26:00

感谢版主雅赏!青衫初学,望多指教!

青衫1 发表于 2012-12-24 20:29:00

感谢先生欣赏!青衫很欣赏先生诗集!以后向先生学习自由诗!

青衫1 发表于 2012-12-24 20:34:00

先生所言极是,初学不懂,今后,一定多向各位前辈老师学习!

快乐大歌 发表于 2012-12-25 19:54:00

青衫谦虚,你的文字功底还不错!
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